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from cardiac arrest is dead and won't attempt to donate blood. They may be referring to a donor with a past history of cardiac arrest, or they may be talking about a different cardiac problem, but they don't make that clear. A single iron-rich meal isn't likely to have any noticeable effect on a donor, and blood donation can cause fainting but not from low blood sugar as they imply.
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The references used in this section are quite old (2016 and 2007!) and medical procedures can change a lot in fifteen years. Are there more up-to-date sources? The 2016 version of the indianbloodbank.com site contains strange writing; is this an official organization? For example, a person suffering
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between blood supply and demand (without first explaining the problems with supply and demand). Then it mentions regulatory procedures and inconsistencies, followed by more donor procedures (sugary drinks, etc) and donor recognition. We need better structure in this section.
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