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Wikihow says "public holidays." I don't think a school career day is either of those, so I removed the capitals again. I really think it's better to say that Dustin finds Sally attractive rather than that he "likes" her. "Likes" is kind of a teenage code either for finding someone attractive or having an actual crush on them; I think we're supposed to use neutral, adult language, even though we're talking about teenagers. I think "puke" is inappropriately colloquial ("vulgar" they used to say) in an encyclopedia article. "Vomit" might be okay, though maybe too technical, so I went with "throw up." I think the scene where Sally takes George to her place and puts him on the pull-out is quite pivotal, and George's better school performance needs to be mentioned to make sense of things later on. I tried to be brief and objective about them, but without them things get confusing later on with George's relapse, the ultimatum, and further consequences. Again, I tried to add less to the Valentine's Day scene, but it seemed misleading just to say that Sally "asks him to have sex with her." In fact, that was the line that moved me to revise the whole thing. Unfortunately my previous impression was a little off--I had thought she didn't even ask the question, but of course she did. But (as I'm sure you know), she kind of blurts it out as maybe a bumbling attempt to say that she "likes" George, and then panics and doesn't know what to do. So I tried to frame the question so it wouldn't be too confusing. I know we're producing a summary, so I tried to be more factual. I think I took some adjectives out of the previous (your?) text. Moving right along, I don't think it's accurate to use the word "instead" for Sally's relationship with Dustin. When she runs into him in the street she's trying to phone George, and when they do get together they start out talking about George. Specifying that George "doesn't do his English term paper" seems like unnecessary detail and could be confusing, so I made it more general. The clause "do every piece of undone homework for the year" is a little unspecific. "Undone" often means that something that was "done" has been "undone," and "for the year" could mean various things. You can figure it out, but it's slightly awkward. I thought "make up all the homework he has missed all year" was more specific. I know we're supposed to be very factual, but I got the impression when I read "At home, George confronts his stepfather about lying about work" that George initiated it all, but the incident actually comes about when George's parents confront
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401:<) page. I made a minor edit to the syntax, to correct the terminology. The term "Marconi" used to describe Bermudian sail type is incorrect. The term Marconi is slang for the use of wire rigging and was applied at the turn of the 19th to 20th century to all rigs, gaff, Bermudian or other wise. The recent wholesale switch from natural fiber rigging to wire rope rigging, made them appear much like the so called Marconi telegraph poles, that were popping up all over the modern world. This term has loosely stuck into modern times, to describe Bermudian rigs in general, though gaff and other rigs where also said to be "Marconi" rigged, if wire rope was employed. The proper term for a triangular sail is Bermudian, with jib-headed and Leg-o-Mutton also be used, though these are more dependent on sail proportions, particular with the Leg-o-Mutton sail.
758:(which is what a colon means, right?) "Sally's smiling face." To be objective, we should just say it's a portait of Sally (or a painting or whatever). "Sally's smiling face" even sounds like it could be the real Sally, or who knows? Likewise if we say that Sally comes into the room, we know what the viewer of the film knows. Last thing: I associate to "opt" with easy choices that don't perhaps carry much weight. You often see it in advertising settings and I don't think it really fits here. Anyway I promise to read any rebuttals you want to send me. I'm sure too that I made some mistakes (again!) in my revisions and I hope you'll fix any you find. I think the rewrite is still an improvement (shoulders of giants and all that) though, and I don't think it should be simply cancelled away.
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