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847:"which meant the Red Sox had the advantage at Fenway Park." I remember commenting on this before, but the home team always has an advantage at its stadium. I think you mean they hosted four of the seven games, and that was the advantage. It would be better to just say it like that. 997:
You really want those Easter-egg links that readers will probably ignore? The way to fix them is to unlink in the body of the text (or work one into the grammar of a sentence in a way that doesn't hide the target with a plain year), and put the rest in the "See also" section,
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So I should've just written "Neutral: I can see both sides"? We both know that would've contributed nothing. I'm trying to help you get this an FA through the realization that that discussion wasn't going anywhere. Besides, if consensus leaned anywhere it was to delete.
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I withdrew the last nomination for this article because I felt there was too much still to do. I hope now having given it enough extra work, having given it another PR and contacted everyone that gave feedback on the last nomination.
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People seem very split on this so I'm not willing to change it at present, it was dicussed at length before the nomination was restarted before coming to the conclusion that it wasn't something that should effect it becoming a FA.
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Schilling image: could it be a little larger? Was he fat? Victory parade and last pics: tiny. Please note the new guidelines on image size. It's no longer treated as a sin to enlarge images (240px is often good, but it
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Format of "The Star-Spangled Banner" is all over the place. It should be "The Star-Spangled Banner" (quotation marks included and linked) the first time used, then with quotation marks and no link after that. Never
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So did you just delete it without even discussing it. I don't like that, there was no clear consensus either way, you should have just commented on the talk page is there anyway to get it back? If not please
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form, and just thought it was very poor. So I've been working on it on and off for over a year to give it a total re-write, remove piontless large amount of piontless trivia and added in refs where needed.
799:– Read the page again and found a few issues, though some improvements have been made since I last commented. Still get the sense that the article could use a little polishing, but it's not bad. 969:"Coming eight months after the New England Patriots' victory in the Super Bowl, the event made Boston the first city to have". Or the start as now, and ", Boston became ..". No "also". 359: 728: 1024:
Pet hate: "his second error in as many plays". It's longer than "in two plays", and the back-reference is to a different grammatical element. Should be cleansed from the language.
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Is there a reason "Fenway Park in Boston, Massachusetts" and "Busch Stadium (II) in St. Louis, Missouri" are linked for every game? I think linking the first time would be fine.
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In Game 3, "...and the inning ended as a result." Not technically wrong, but you don't really have to say "as a result". Even stating "...score from third, ending the inning".
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Once again, the logo is inherently part of the subject. Basically every other modern sporting event FA has the logo as the lead image for exactly that reason. Is
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In describing Game 7 of the ALCS, you could mention the Johnny Damon grand slam, since that was the pivotal moment (not one I like to remember, but whatever).
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Caption: "then-career-high" ... any way of recasting? Apart from the grammatical awkwardness, it fails to wrap on my window width. "hit 46 h r, then a c h."?
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Route to the series: "when Yankees shortstop Derek Jeter made a catch on the run before hurling himself head first into the stands." Hyphen for "head first"?
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It states that Schilling was in "considerable discomfort", "considerable" sounds awful close to POV to me. A quote from the article would be better.
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Thanks but I don't want a "quick fix", if the nomination fails I don't mind, I'd rarther reslove this properly. There was no clear consensus
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To say "stopped abruptly" is basically the same thing as "suddenly stopped" why do you need the adverb? Unless it's a quote from an article.
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I really need more people to give feedback on what to do about the logo. Otherwise I'm pretty sure I've addressed all feedback given here.
828:"during which they each hit more than 30 home runs and 100 runs batted in". You can't hit a run batted in. Change "hit" to something else. 40: 850:
Game 2: "and two more singles by Johnny Damon and Orlando Cabrera, enabled two more runs to score to make it 6–1." Take the comma out.
968:"With the New England Patriots' victory in the Super Bowl eight months before, it also made Boston the first city to have" -: --> 853:
Game 3: "After the next batter Albert Pujols was thrown out by Mueller, the inning ended." Comma before and after Pujols' name.
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The citation needs to be at the end of that sentence. Even if it means having the same citation after consecutive sentences.
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Then put it in quotes and cite it to the article. We can't just copy and paste other articles without giving them credit.
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Game 2: there's a single line trapped above the table (Game 3, too ... why?). I can't work out the bolding in the table.
371:"Eldred came in to relieve Morris, after a mediocre performance, in the fifth inning." Again, mediocre according to who? 975:
Watch the use of team names to start sentence after sentence in the lead. Couple of times it became obvious to me.
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Issue with the logo now sorted. I wasn't happy with the way it was deleated but it's gone now nonetheless.
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I missed this the first time "President, George W. Bush" in the Aftermath section doesn't need a comma.
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Double needs linked to the leadoff one by Damon, not the later ones by RenterĂ­a and Walker
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Game 7 wasn't as eventful as some of the other game in the series so I've left it out.
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In Game 2, God Bless America should be in quotes, not italics (this goes for all songs)
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might not hurt in the aftermath. I'll leave it up to you if you want to include it.
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No, heh, I must be seeing things. I thought one was there, must've read it wrong.
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Prose looks good. I won't support due to the logo, but the hard part is done.
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No metric conversion ok here? I don't know the WP convention in this context.
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Bottom: dash then numeral I took to be a minus sign wrongly spaced. (–9)
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Pity the image of the trophy is compromised by the background fence. :-(
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Image removed. I didn't care one way or the other, but talks stagnated.
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On the whole, very well written. Nice. A few over-large paras, though.
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as the image has been properly removed and deleted; no further issues.
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as removing it would not affect readers' understanding of the article.
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Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in
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Yes, generally things are only linked the first time they appear.
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In Game 4, "Bonds and RamĂ­rez also received", why the "also"?
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Comments which remain unaddressed from prior to restart:
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So it should only be linked once in the whole article?
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Then it should be in quotes and cited to the article.
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In Game 1, Tessie should be in quotes and linked to
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As per before. Took a lot of work, but looks great.
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