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when necessary. Other than that, the article went in-depth on many essential topics. One of my only suggestions is to possibly search for more behaviors that are specific to A. pallipes. While what was written was good, I often forgot that I was reading about a particular species and was given the sense that I was reading on solely the genus. I think that this problem could be easily remedied by including a couple sections unique to A. pallipes. Other than that, the writing was clear, concise, and well-referenced.
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section, you switch between 3rd and 1st person. Don’t use “we.” I made an edit for you there, changing it to “There is a clear dimorphism…” I really enjoyed your venom section, it’s the most thorough section I’ve seen written on venom so far. Finally, I think some pictures would really spruce up your article. Overall, it is well written and very thorough. Great job!
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